http://femaelstrom27.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] femaelstrom27.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] misssara11 2008-12-24 03:36 am (UTC)

Oooh, VERY sexy. Can we see the bit where Peter works on "naughty"? ;) I've missed these two.

One thing -- "There was a thick black belt wrapped around her waist from which a very short skirt, that matched the bra, flared out from" is a little redundant -- you don't need that second "from."

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